What Goes Around, Comes Around.
Reviewer: iamaninjadude @ Lemon Swirls.

Note: Author should know that I do not personally know her and vice versa. I, the reviewer, have nothing against the author. If you find the comments too harsh or mean, sorry but I'm just doing this to improve your skills for future stories. Thank you for requesting in Lemon Swirls.

Title: 3/5
- "What goes around comes around." It's a really common expression, but in the fan-fiction world, it's out of the ordinary. It's not mindblowing, it's simple just like the plot. When I've read the story, I was expecting something that has something to do with karma or something like that (hah, I just used something 3x in one sentence XD) because that's the impression that your title gave me.

Introduction: 9/10
- So the forewords was amazing, hands down, no arguments on that. There wasn't even a need for some characters' profiles because the 'preview' already hinted the readers how the characters are in the story. As for the trailer, I think it was good (I could have thought it's amazing if I watched it before I finished reading the story. boo me).

Appearance: 5/5
- The poster is fabulous, again. Jiyong's glare melted me a little -blinkblink-, and the picture of the ulzzang is pretty cute. Perfect score for you!

Flow and Writing Style: 20/25
- It was hard, reviewing the story. When I was reading it I asked myself, "is there something wrong with the story?" but at the same time the back of my mind was yelling a "yes, there is" but I just can't figure out what. The begging was there, the love triangle was there, the quirky best buds were there, the clingy girlfriend was also there, the twists were placed where they're supposed to be, the conflict was straightforward and understandable... but it's not perfect. Your writing style is my favorite actually because it's organized and easy to read. The progress was pretty quick and slow at the same time; slow because judging from the length, there should have been a 'big explosion' that will blow me away but there isn't yet. It's quite fast because, I don't know, Seunghyun and Eunji are together yet they're not. It was a little confusing but oh well, maybe it's only me and my slow mind.

Plot: 10/15
- Karma only happened in the beginning of the fan-fiction where Eunji is narrating her love life and how she begged Jiyong to take her back after dumping him for no reason. It's like life slapping on her face for what she did (dumping GD? are you serious author? x__x) That was the whole idea. Jiyong has a new girlfriend who seems like a slut and Eunji is all dramatic and emo-ish then OH, here comes Seunghyun! He kind of twisted the plot a little. At the beginning I thought it would focus more on how Eunji would deal about Jiyong and his new girlfriend (whose name I completely forgot while doing this review) but right in the middle where Seunghyun makes his appearance, out of the sudden it's like "oh, seunghyun and jiyong will fight over eunji. it's a fight between the two. it's their problem, not eunji" and I was like, "what? intro didn't tell me that". It's either you got off-tracked a little or I'm the one who's wrong.

Originality: 8/10
- Your fan-fiction is different and typical at the same time. There was some parts of the story that made it cliche (superb youngster, underage drinking); sometimes the writer kind of forgets the setting of the story and just writes what she think would the reader be interested on. I won't duct points on it though because, c'mon let's all be serious here, kids nowadays tend to be all gangsta and rebel and just do whatever the hell they want (drink, smoke, get laid on, have fun, etc).The thing I liked about your story is how it's a Big Bang fic and even if the profiles didn't fit the characters (I was actually expecting Seunghyun to be a dorky kid or a bad-ass son) it was still fun reading it.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling: 14/15
- I LOVE YOU. You don't know how badly I wanted to read a good grammar-ed story like yours. Writers should be more like you; your vocabulary isn't the best or the most professional-looking but it's understandable. You didn't make me have to grab a dictionary and search for the definition of the word. It was good that it didn't make me want to kill myself. Although, nobody is perfect, I did spot some mistakes but there aren't really grammar mistakes - it just sounded wrong in my head. But it's my head anyway so 14 for you!

Characterization: 8/10
- I've never fallen in love. I don't know if people who do fall in love really becomes annoyingly stupid. I mean, you love her and she's begging for another chance and you'll just be cold to her?! (GD babes I still love you) Your characters seemed realistic, except for Seunghyun's role. I'm like the best looking girl ever and I don't see photographers stalking me in my school. No, just kidding, I'm not the best but it sounded a little "rom-fic-totally-cliche-idea". Your story sounded so real but that part just kind of pulled it down a little. Nonetheless, 8 marks for you!

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
- People nowadays write about SHINee (I LOVE SHINee) but it's kind of getting tiring. Honestly. They write about the same thing that the most original idea was made into the most commonly used. I'm glad it's about Big Bang, because I miss reading Big Bang fan-fictions. Really. Thank you -tears- You have to start updating though, or else... I'll do something that you wouldn't like... just kidding! But seriously ;D

Total: 82/100