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Sunday, April 3, 2011 @ 4:11 AM

Title: What’s Love: A Secondhand Emotion

Author: Scarlett_Victoria

Story URL: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/28984/what-s-love-a-secondhand-emotion-jonghyun-oneshot-shinee-shinsekyung

Reviewer: ilubshinee

Title:- 2/5- I really don’t know what are you trying to say on the title of your story. Also I don’t know what you are pointing about the words ‘Secondhand Emotion’. I was confused at first but at the same time curious about it. So it was really interesting but I don’t find it catchy at all. That was my first impression though.

Poster/Background:- 8/10- I loved the poster so much. Hoho. Well, it was well-made and it really represents the story’s genre. Jonghyun and Shin Sekyung looked really cool here. But I think pictures didn’t connect with each other. I think it would be better if the two pictures would connect. :) The quote in the poster it’s nice and has an awesome meaning it really made sense. Although the poster looks dark it still looks really good for the story. Gets high remarks from me! :D

Description, Foreword and plot:- 14/20 – When I read your foreword I had understand why the title is like that. I see you explain the word ‘love’ on the description. And I liked it. You know I really don’t know what love is and when I read it I think I got some idea. Lol. Don’t mind my randomness. XD And I loved it because I haven’t read like that before that’s why it’s a little cool for me. The foreword was good. I was captivated by the words you said on your foreword. I got chills I don’t know why. And the things you said in your foreword it’s real! I mean everyone who falls in-love in the end always gets hurt. But I think there is also happy ending right?

Creativity/Uniqueness:- 9/10- Pretty high huh? :D. I really liked the story plot of your story. It was the first time I read a fanfic about Jonghyun and Shin Se Kyung. I love how you ended up in that way because as you can see all fanfics ends with a happy ending. So I think it’s better to have sad ending sometimes. I loved it’s storyline I mean it could happen it real life which I wish not. I don’t want Jonghyun to be sad. :)

Flow and Chapters:- /10- Since it’s only a one-shot I will not grade you in this category. :)

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:- 19/20 – You don’t have any wrong spellings or grammars. Even punctuations you really have good English. ^^ I was really impressed. Good job. ^^

Characterisation:- 10/10- The characters were well-portrayed. Their emotions were really explained and because of this you will really feel what the characters are feeling in that certain situation. It’s so nice to read fanfics like this especially when characters are well portrayed you could see and feel their pain or happiness while reading it.

Writing Style:- 8/10- Your writing style is good. It has good spacing and fonts. It does not hurt the reader’s eyes. Some authors were using coloured fonts or sometimes too small or big at their stories which is not good. So I’m happy that you have used your space in writing this awesome fic.

Excitement and Extras:- 4/5- I don’t feel much excitement while reading the story because I already have the feeling that it will end sadly.

Overall = 74/100

Reviewer’s Comment: Hello there! Thank-you for choosing me as your reviewer! I had fun reading your story when I first read it. There’s already a warning that I will need tissues but I only took one ply. I didn’t know that I will cry so badly. I feel Jonghyun’s pain in your story you’re so bad. Haha.. Well, I answered in your poll! XD haha... I think the ending was good enough. But if you wanted to continue it I guess you’ll make it good. :)

About the story: But I like how did this story ended up. Jonghyun became strong and promised to himself that he’ll never cry again because of a girl. I hate how Shin Se kyung acted after jonghyun showing him his true love for her. Still have the guts to kiss him after doing that to him. Grr. LOL.. Anyway I know it’s just a story. But you did really great in this one-shot. Good Job! <3

-ilubshinee ^^
hoy,hoy!~ <3

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