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Monday, April 25, 2011 @ 6:07 AM

Title: Arranged Marriage with Mr. Arrogant

Author: neversayaye and 03Dreamer15

Story URL: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/26190/arranged-marriage-with-mr-arrogrant-comedy-onew-schoollife-shinee-snsd-taemin-you/18

Reviewer: ilubshinee

Note: I, the reviewer am only doing my job. If I ever hurt your feelings, please do not get mad at me. I too am not perfect. I’m here to help you to make your fanfics better. :) Thank-you for requesting! Spread the word!

Title:- 4/5- It really catches my attention, as well as the other readers also. It suites the story well and they connected. I think I saw titles like these before, but not exactly the same title.

Poster/Background:- 9/10- The poster was awesome! The colour is bright pink, but it does not hurt the eyes. It’s well-done and the characters at the poster suit the poster that is made. The thick black line at the top and bottom bothers me, but it’s still awesome. I totally adore Mary in making such beautiful posters. Good choice! :)

Description, Foreword and plot:- 19/20 – Description is well-written, no mistakes at all. You told what the story plot is, and I really liked reading fics if they have explained the story plot already. You also explained the character’s personalities and I liked it. The story plot is really nice and unique. About the foreword, there something that caught my attention. It’s the red jumbled letters at the bottom. I don’t quite understand the words you’re trying to say. But I understand it after focusing on it.

Creativity/Uniqueness:- 8/10- This is the first time I read a rated fic about SHINee, and it’s nice. The story is good, as well the flow of the story. It’s quite unique how the main characters Sun Hye and Taemin fights. But I think it’s too repetitive to see stories whose conflict is always like that. I still liked the storyline. :)

Flow and Chapters:- 9/10- Your chapters connected with each other well. Although I was a little confused with colour-coded character thingy. But I liked the idea of it, Instead of doing POV’s, you made it that way? I guess? That’s what I liked about this story. :) Every chapter you made is so good. Neversayaye’s chapters were all good, although there is some wrong punctuation you still manage to turn it out so good. About 03Dreamer15, the chapters you made are also good. I don’t find anything dull or boring about the chapters each one you made.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:- 19/20 – There are no wrong spellings or grammars in this story, although some punctuations like I said. But, it’s no big deal. It does not affect this story at all.

Characterisation:- 10/10- The characters you explained at the description is well-portrayed. As well as the other characters you’re adding up.

Writing Style:- 9/10- Both your writing styles are good, It’s nice to read clean writing styles. It’s very pleasing to the reader’s eyes.

Excitement and Extras:- 5/5- I will this as a bonus points for you! :)

Overall = 92/100

Reviewer’s Comment: Hello there! Thank-you for choosing me as your reviewer! Your story is really good, that’s why you gained at lot of subscribers in just 14 chapters! I hope you will continue this and update more. Keep on writing and congratulations!

-ilubshinee ^^
hoy,hoy!~ <3

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