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SAPPHiREDREAMs' Review

Tuesday, August 2, 2011 @ 7:16 AM

Title: Words Meet Heartbeat
Author: SAPPHiREDREAMs
Reviewer: ll0vex3_her
Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/55634/words-meet-heartbeats-contest-sunsun-supergeneration

Title: 6/10

Its nice how you used the prompt as the title. The title's definitely something that would attract my attention, since its something like.. my type of title? LOLs. Yes yes, such titles catches my attention. Since the feeling is that there's something more behind the meaning of the title, hahas.

Although...wouldn't "When Words Meet Heartbeat" sounds nicer than "Words Meet Heartbeat"? Yes, also much longer...but yeah, it sounds much nicer. That's my opinion of course.

Foreword/Description: 8/10

It was a nice description, although short. But yeah, there's the hook and the general idea that caught my interest. After all, who would have though that Sunny and Sungmin would be "enemies"?

And the foreword was sooo beautiful! There's a certain feel to it that I just wanted to continue reading, and its was awesome. Although I didn't really er... felt the need for the underlines.

Plot: 17/25

The plot wasn't really original, as far as I could remember, lols. Because mostly, its either love between idols/ocs or hatred at first. LOLs. And in the end, somehow they will end up together. Yes, it isn't a very original plot, but still, its nice in a way. Since its Sunny and Sungmin, the adorable couple to be the ones hating each other. Quite unexpected in my opinion. And I really didn't expect such a plot since with such a title.

Writing: 7/10

The writing is nice and I love the way you wrote it. Short and simple, but also nice and detailed. At least it showed how much they hated each other. It was simple, detailed, but still, simple - which is a good thing sometimes ^^

Spelling/grammar: 20/25

Overall, there wasn't much mistakes. But there was indeed some phrases that caused confusion - for me. Of course, although simple, your writing would be perfect as usual. I love the way that I could basically find nothing much xD LOLs. I'm such a suckish reviewer huh? Hahas.

Flow - 10/10

I'm happy to say that the flow was definitely beautiful. Okay fine, I'm being sweet here. But that is indeed the truth. You didn't skip any scenes. I love the way how it ended. Definitely sweet between SunSun and the other couples. Haha ^^

Overall Enjoyment - 10/10

Of course, it's not surprising that I would love this story to the core, hahas. Since SunSun is also my best OTP and is soo amazingly written. Of course, another story that made my day. So sweet and beautiful. And you're such an amazing author!! Gah~~!! *squeals like a fangirl* xDD

Total: 78/100

Reviewer's Note: Mianhae~~ I'm not a good reviewer so yeah. You must be disappointed huh? Mianhae Jessica~~ Heehee, still, I really love this story! And this couple as well ^^

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