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calling littlepenguins ! (fanfic review)

Sunday, August 14, 2011 @ 5:38 AM

Title: 1 lie: No, I’m not his Girlfriend!

Author: littlepenguins

Story URL: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/34403/1-lie-no-i-m-not-his-girlfriend-comedy-ljoe-romance-shinee-taemin-teentop-you

Reviewer: ilubshinee

Note: I, the reviewer am only doing my job. If I ever hurt your feelings, please do not get mad at me. I too am not perfect. I’m here to help you to make your fanfics better. :) Thank-you for requesting! Spread the word!

Title:- 4/5- The title was very eye catching. Even though, it was a common type of title already, I still find it interesting and controversy. When you first saw the title, you would think, what would this story’s line? Why this story has this kind of title? And also, the title suits the story very well. When you read the story title, you will already have the idea of what the story is going to be.

Poster/Background:- 5/5- A poster made by Mary517, ahh.. as usual it was really awesome. The polka dots background and poster is really captivating. But I think, it’s too bright and flashy for the eyes. Also, the picture used for the girl does not really suit the poster. Her face covered and you can’t identify it. But still, I really love the poster and background, suits the story’s theme really well. Cool, cute, bright and fun!

Description, Foreword and plot:- 17/20 – The description really caught the eyes of the readers. When you read it, you will grow curious and interested about the story and its succeeding chapters. Foreword, as usual as what other writers do, they always used it to identify their characters. Usually, when I read story, I only read the descriptions. And when I was captivated bi it already, I don’t really look on forewords already, especially if it’s about the characters and its plot. I will just know what the story is going to be. The ploy was really unique, but cliché. Idols will meet fans and fall in love, problems with regards fans, I think it’s quite cliché already. But your story plot was really amazing; I didn’t expect such things and events will happen unless you read it all.

Creativity/Uniqueness/Genre:- 10/15- Like what I said, it’s really interesting and captivating. How the story is written is very creative. You expressed the emotions well. That’s all. I already said what I want on the description part. ^^

Flow and Chapters:- 8/10- When I read the first chapter? I was like *kyaaa!~* It was really good and exciting that it could actually happen in real life! Really! I just hope I lived in Korea and happen to see a 500 won coin and make a wish on it. ^^ How the story flow on each chapters was really great, it was well connected and you would feel the twist and turns of the story that you would actually wanted to read and click the next button. When the chapters and stories are getting longer, I felt really happy reading it, especially when L. Joe appeared! Whoa! My two bias on the same story! However, I felt sad for L Joe at the end, but still ‘we’ became best friends, right? ^^

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:- 15/15 – Actually, since I’m not really a grammar freak, I find your story really good in English, spelling and grammar. Although, I read some wrong spellings I just thought of it as a typographical error. But in all, it was well-written and understandable.

Characterisation:- 8/10- You portrayed your characters well. You really showed what they’re attitudes are. But, the part when Taemin wore a chicken costume just to hide from ‘me’ (since your using a ‘you’ story). I just really can’t imagine Taemin would wear such a thing in public. LOL

Writing Style:- 8/10- Your writing style is good. It’s is written simply and neatly. First 5 chapters were colored pink, and I really don’t like reading fics with colored fonts because it’s really unpleasant for my eyes. But because you write it beautifully, I read it even though it has colored font. You changed it to black afterwards, so I really loved it. I’m happy you thought of doing that! ^^

Additionals:

Excitement and Extras:- 5/5- I will this as a bonus points for you! :)

Overall = 80/100

Reviewer’s Comment: First of all, sorry it took so long!!

Hello there! Thank-you for choosing me as your reviewer! It’s not my first time to read a ‘you’ fanfiction. I don’t really like when you would have to change ~~~~~~~ to your name. It feels really awkward. o.o You could use a bunch of Korean names there, I just don’t feel changing my name to that piece of line. ^^

The truth is I really loved all your stories! I subscribed them all! I’m a big fan of yours. But don’t worry, I didn’t grade your story because you’re my bias. You just really deserved to have high remarks. Keep on writing and get more subs! Your such an amazing and talented writer!

-ilubshinee ^^

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