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Saturday, March 26, 2011 @ 2:22 AM

Title: Concrete Angel

Story URL: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/7780/concrete-angel-angst-mature-pain-shinee-taemin-violence-yaoi

Reviewer: ilubshinee

First of all... I’m sorry for taking it for me so long to review your story. I’ve been very busy to school and plus I’m not very used to this kind of genre. ^^ I don’t usually read rated fictions and especially it’s yaoi so it’s kind of hard for me to read it all. But I finished it! Yey! Hope my review to your story is good. :) Well here it is.

Title:- 3/5- At first I was confused to what your title really means... It’s kind of confusing but It’s really unique and you will not know why its title is Concrete Angel... Is that a stoned angel or something? But it’s really cool and awesome to think of a title like that. If I were a reader I would definitely click your story because it catches attention which is really good for you both. I wonder who think of that title between the two of you. It’s really interesting. And it sounds mysterious and scary too which is well-connected to what the genre your story is. I think you were referring to Taemin who is the Concrete Angel? Am I right? Correct me if I’m wrong. ^^

Poster/Background:- 8/10- I could say the poster is really good. It matches the story well the dark, angst of the theme of the poster. And also with the background that you used it really is well matched for the story. Also Taemin’s picture that is used to the poster is really nice. His expression and connects to his character which is innocent and pure. It’s just a little bit blurry for me. And I love how you change the poster in every chapter is well made and I like how it connects to the chapter.

Description, Foreword and plot:- 17/20 – I gave you high remarks for this section because your foreword and description is well written. It was really good and you really explained what you wanted your readers to know about what you were going to write. You two are awesome I could really say that. And the teasers were great it was really captivating and exciting. I love how you talk to your readers as well. You really used your foreword and description to catch the reader’s attention as well.

Creativity/Uniqueness:- 10/10- *Claps* Your story plot sure is really unique and creative. I don’t know how you thought of like that kind of storyline. I mean it’s really scary and it’s like it’s happening in real life. Also sometimes I can’t imagine SHINee members doing that to Taemin. But this plot of yours was really unique and I love how you made it. I never read dark and angst genre before and because of this story I learn lo like it a bit. Although it’s scary for me.

Flow and Chapters:- 9/10- The flow of the story is well connected with each other. You won’t feel anything held hanging in the air. It is well written as well. And for the chapters I see you changed you posters of your chapters which I think is good. I love how the story is flowing in every chapter the intense and excitement with every chapter... And the titles you used for every chapter was nice it’s really connected in that particular chapter. The titles were unique.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:- 19/20 – I don’t see nothing wrong with the usage of grammars and spellings you were really a good writer. The vocabulary is a little bit harsh but I know it’s for the story. And I see you really used the words in appropriate manner. You were really great with your English.

Characterisation:- 10/10- Well, For the characterisation of SHINee here. Is well portrayed although they were really harsh on Taemin and I feel pity every time they do something on him. And you portrayed the feeling of Taemin really good. It’s like I’m watching it not reading it. I can purely imagine them in that particular situation. The characters are fitted for the roles they have and you made them alive in your story.

Writing Style:- 8/10- I like your writing style. It’s like a novel book. Although the font and font size is kind of awkward to the point that it’s confusing to read. But you don’t need to change that. It was only based on my opinion and continue in writing! You were great.

Excitement and Extras:- 5/5- The story was just too great I can’t say anything else. :)

Overall = 81/100

80-100 - Awesome! Daebak! ^^ A fic can be featured. Congratulations!

Reviewer’s Comment: Thank-you for choosing me as your reviewer. ! And again sorry it took me a long time reviewing your fic. You know while reading this fiction I always feel goosebumps and chills. I don’t know how did you did that ? Haha. Anyway you two were great authors and writers keep it up. Your story gets a lot of good feedbacks I could see it in the comments of your readers and the subscribers you got. This is also the first story I reviewed that got perfect remarks in a particular category which means it was really good. And this story is just awesome. Hoho. Thanks for requesting at lemonswirls! Spread the word! :D

About the story: The story was awesome. I tear up. Honestly at the last chapter? When Taemin died? Omo. It’s really sad but at the same time happy. At least he’s already free now. And this is the very first time I read a rated yaoi fic. So it’s kind of awkward for me to read it I don’t usually read rated and yaoi fanfics. But I manage to finish it because it was really great. Congratulations! This is one of the most memorable fic I ever read. :)

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