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Review for Valentine's Day; written by jennyhearts

Saturday, August 20, 2011 @ 9:16 PM

Title: Valentine's Day

Author: jennyhearts

Story URL: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/24957/

Reviewer: joanne200969 @ http://lemonswirls.visualchic.net/

Reviewer’s Note: Annyeong! ^^ joanne200969 here. XD haha lols, you’re my first requestor, so I thought I should make your comfortable reading this. ^_^ Sorry for my randomness and lameness…xD Anyway, let’s starting the review! (lol)

Title: 3/5
the title wasn’t really much of any creative or eye catching one, so I couldn’t give you any higher. However, it matches the plot, in which I added another mark for it.

Poster & Background & Trailer ( if there is) : /10
NIL, but I won’t count the marks in. However, best if you get a poster/background/trailer quick, since it would make the story look more eye catching.

Foreword: 6/10
Ne, everything was fine. The foreword and description was great, but somehow it made me confused. @_@ I mean, how would a girl hate Valentine’s Day while she actually wanted love on Valentine’s Day? Lols, I guess I’m not that much for a great reviewer after all. xD

Plot: 20 /25
Well- I don’t know how to say this. O_O The plot was actually great, but it’s used quite a lot. However, it was easy for me to read and understand, which I liked a lot. But due to the overused plot- I cannot give you any higher.

Flow: 7 /10
The flow is pretty good, however, the first chapter, it was a bit rushed.

Character Profiles ( if there is) & Characterization: 7/10
The characterization was great, I liked how was the girl made (did you give her a name O_O) but Junho was really just one of those good-looking boys from thousands of other fics.

Grammar, Spelling, etc: 8 /10
Yes, you’re actually pretty good at this! No big mistakes, however, there is a couple of sentences out of place. However, overall, it’s great! ^^

Writing Style: 3/5
Well, your writing style was great, but it did kinda bored me out a little. Maybe adding more descriptive words and more ‘interesting’ senses would be better.

Extra marks: 3/5
I’m not THAT much of a fan of 2pm (well, typically, I used to be a really huge fan, but after I saw SHINee I changed. Oh well, lol sorry for getting out of topic) but this fic made me like 2pm a little bit more I guess? xD

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
It was fine, but like I said in writing style, I did get a little bit bored.

Total: 67/100

Author’s Note: I’m sorry if the score was bad! Listen, it was quite good. This is actually one of the highest scores I given, actually. (Yep, my highest right now is 75. You’re not that far behind!). Continue writing and improving, and good luck! ^^

LOL, this was random. xD

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