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-polkadotted review

Wednesday, August 17, 2011 @ 2:24 AM

Title: 100 Ways on How To Seduce Taemin

Author: -polkadotted

Reviewer: ll0vex3_her

Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/47181/100-ways-on-how-to-seduce-taemin-comedy-fxband-krystaljung-shinee-taemin-taestal

Title: 6/10

Wow, this title really wows me since its basically either going to be a very lust-filled story, or else its comedy. Its a nice title and definitely will attract Taemin-biased fans. Although, since the story was how Krystal want to get Taemin because she loves him..should it be something to do with love instead of seduce?

Foreword/Description: 10/10

I like the way how you question and answer, and also in such a funny way as well. Its adorable and there's the hook I need to make me want to continue reading such a comical story, since everyone likes a laugh xD

Plot: 17/25

Its not a lot of times do I come across such a story. I mean, the seducing part - yes, but the way how you wrote it, no. Since it wasn't exactly simply seducing, it was trying to make Taemin loves Krystal. Still, although quite plain, it was still nice ^^

Writing: 5/10

The way you write was not bad, although not enough to catch my attention. ~~(Here I am, I just can't help but be bias when it comes to style of writing..only some types of writing actually catches my attention and makes me wanted to read regardless of whatever..)~~ Okay , ignore that, lols. Anyway, your writing was not bad, really. Just well..try and make the words bigger? Maybe its just me, but its quite a headache trying to read the small words jumbled together into a long paragraph.

Spelling/grammar: 20/25

Beautiful! I spot little-to-no mistakes! LOLS xD But yes, none. Congrats and good luck~! (Ps, my english isn't really good..so I don't know if my judgement could be trusted..lols xD)

Oh, and this may be a careless mistake:

Chapter 7:
I was SUPPOSEDLY FLIRTING WITH HIM!

I think it should be: I was PURPOSELY FLIRTING WITH HIM!

Flow - 6/10

The flow was not bad, it wasn't exactly rushed although does Krystal really love Taemin or does she just want his body? Because apparently she seems to have fallen for him a little bit tad too fast.. Not that I don't believe in love at first sight..but there must be a reason why! Apart from that, I find everything okay ^^

Overall Enjoyment - 6/10
I'm not exactly a Krystal fan. But I do love Taelli and would hope for anything for it to end up with Taelli - although impossible. Hahas. And such story isn't really my type. So yeah, but still, love the shy Taemin in it. Still...doesn't like Krystal xD

Total: 75/100

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